>_< why must you hurt her so, if your gonna draw a naked girl, you draw it right, its simnply not a doodle its art, and as art it needs to be respected by its creator and those that view her, it is the human body and is which we are its models so look around theres lots of ppl you can get to understand bends and propotions right.
her right index finger needs to be evened out, and her mouth a little bit fixed, you my firend are on the rightous way of ecchi, i give you points for it
we can all tlak about what he did wrong but im gonna show him imo
this is a quick 5 min paintshop edit of your picture
the black noticeable lines are corrections the finger and the mouth and the head along with the glove
i had to to redo the mouth since it was too "puffy", but the eye was moved in closer abit, you tend to draw too close to the edge (and still draw full figured), its a good picture and with some work you can be a great dojin or h manga artist
I NEED A SCANNER SEND ME A SCANNER AND I WILL BLOW YOU AWAY WITH MY ECCHI PR0N STYLE DRAWING