it looks kinda like you tried too hard...it doesn't look like you made it creatively. I unno, looks like you just tried making an image bcuz you had to pump out something, not like you made it bcuz you were in an artsy mood. Kinda like when a novelist is forced to pump out a quick sequal to a popular book and the sequal stinks. YOur pic doesn't stink but it looks almost rushed.
I like the font you choose, but I don't like how you chose such a neon green to outline it, especially when that is the first time that color comes up distinctly in the image. Everything behind the text is great! Kind of reminds me of stained-glass windows.