ull probably hate me now, but i voted hopeless...
looking at both drawings, i conclude:
- you have totally no eye for detail
- you have totally no eye for anatomy
- you have totally no clue how manga should look like
last thing is, i guess that you just dont really try hard enough, i mean, if you wanted to draw real manga, than you would at least have tried to look at reallife movement and anatomy (proportions etc)... you called it manga just because the cras have big eyes.... well thats just wrong
few tips:
- go out with a couple of blanc pages and a pencil (NO ERASER), sit somewhere in a crouwded place (parks, malls,....) and sketch peoples movements in stickfigures or in basic shapes (spheres, cubes....) really quick, dont take more than a half minute to complete 1 sketch, keep doing this untill you understand the proportions..
- study the human anatomy REAL good, the placement of muscles, turning points of arms, legs etcetcetc....
- work hard, keep working, dont stop working... one day ull be there, and i hope that ill have to vote "its ok" very very soon
greetz