ill be honest, rap music isnt my thing, so this may sound a lil "offensive"
i was expecting (for some reason) since your my friend, that you would do something different from the other million rap songs out there that all sound exactly the same, i was dissapointed, it sounds just like every rap song on BET, on the radio, and on mtv,(im not talking about musical quality, im talking about the general sound of it, its unoriginal)
it cant really boil down to the fact that your not a "professional " yet, you could learn to control your vocals better and all that stuff mentioned above, but if it still sounded like every other rap song that everyone has already heard thousands of times over, theres really no point in it
kinda more of a comment to the general genre of rap, but it is a rap song so, meh >_>, i could go on and on but i think ill stop here to avoid awkward moments on AIM