~*Logan*~ said:
I guess asking politely not to go off topic doesn't work.
Well Captain Politeness, usually if you ask nicely
in the first place, instead of editing it in after the fact, it has a greater effect. You can't expect to say "Here's an essay, discuss", without having people discuss
the essay.
But on that note, I'll critique your rant.
Every argument you've made, someone else either said first, or drew a webtoon about it first. The Jack Thompson debate is tired, in fact, I was kind of hoping it was dead. Your rant isn't really all that analytical either, more so a description of all the video game related stuff Jack's done in his career, but couldn't your prof just read wikipedia and get the same story, without all the wit I suppose?
The whole thing is pretty one-sided, and biased. But that's the point, right? And you can't forget all the witty insults like:
Jack Thompson is quite possibly the most illogical, stupid, and irritating man I have even heard of during my 20 years of life.
Is that a thesis? Wow, such strong arguments carry the weight of "my dad can beat up your dad" and "you can't come to my birthday party." But again, I guess this is a rant, not an essay.
And yet, he went to law school, AND passed the bar, while you're writing about him in an
arts school, go figure.
I really don't think Jack is stupid. Just an extremist trying to push an agenda,
by any means possible. Now
that's a thesis.