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[Virtigo Seven]

Demons in my Head

The demons in my head are screaming again.
Heart is pounding
Blood is pumping
But I’m not scared.
The fear is gone
But yet they scream

Panic, panic…
Rush, rush…
Panic! Panic!
Rush! Rush!
PANIC!! PANIC!!
RUSH!! RUSH!!
Silence

Panic, panic…
Rush, rush…
Panic! Panic!
Rush! Rush!
PANIC!! PANIC!!
RUSH!! RUSH!!
Silence
I conquered my demons long ago,
They can’t beat me
I wont let them.
I grow tired of this game
This war,
This war I won.
It’s forever over,
And yet they fight,
Screaming,
There cry rings loud:

Panic, panic…
Rush, rush…
Panic! Panic!
Rush! Rush!
PANIC!! PANIC!!
RUSH!! RUSH!!
Silence

Panic, panic…
Rush, rush…
Panic! Panic!
Rush! Rush!
PANIC!! PANIC!!
PANIC!! PANIC!!
RUSH!! RUSH!!
Silence
There is no end,
But I don’t care.
I beat the demons in my head once already
I can do it again…

like it?

 

[Pain]

id say you have some inner demons
*rimshot*
wooo!!!

eh, its good. kinda hard to get into it without a beat.

 

[DruDown]

what is this? Goth Poems?

 

[solidus]

i think its great, the only thing i dont like is the panic rush parts, they make it sound as bit cheesy, a bit like a cheap musical or stageplay, (no offence ment) the rest of it i like

 

[Virtigo Seven]

None taken. Realise I was in math class when I wrote it, so I wasn't exactlly "on my toes"