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This is a past experience i felt like writing about, can any of you relate? This thread isn't meant mostly for my poem, but more for the responses, but also please critic.

“Pain from the past never forgotten, never last”
By: David Perault

All the good times in my head
Gone and past, shriveled and dead
Tears of the future, pain from the past
Contained in my own broken glass

Pour it not unto those I know
To hard to bear, to hard to show.
Changed forever, your not the same
I don’t understand and take the blame
The pain I have received, more than you should share
It tears at my soul and is more than I can bare

Trying to fix the situation, broken and apart
You laugh and giggle as you tear out my heart
To you this is just a memory of the past to be
To me it is a life changing experience, one to me

I shall never forget the times we had
The times we were happy and never sad
But those times are over because of you
For it was nothing more than a game for two

I walk past you and admire you
You turn your head and act like you never knew
You want to forget me and our past
I want to hurry and complete this task
For the pain I bare is more than you know
For the pain I bare is something I wont show.

All of the tears that ran from my eyes
The love you professed and never did try
You were a fake, I was for real
I said I loved you, we made a deal
You left and walked away
Your not here on this dreadful day

You don’t share this hurt I share
You lie to me and act like you care.
You want nothing more with me
So turn around and just leave.
 
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Please do not double post.
 
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Dont feel bad, its not that people dont care, its that they... well I cant finish that. The point is you havent been shunnned, its just that most people probably arent comfortable posting about these things. Or they simply dont care, whichever works for you.

...it was a little negative after all.
 
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Well it's a good poem. Obviously meant for someone who recently loved and lost. I can relate to loving, but not someone leaving me. The one I loved didn't have the same feelings, so it's not quite the same.

But it is a good poem, and I think anyone who recently broke up from a serious relationship could relate.
 
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Well it was a recent break up around a month and half ago, but thats not why i wrote it, and i know some poeple don't care and dont want to post about it i know this i was simply posteing because there was 49 views, i was just saying thank you to those who did look at it. I understand why some people do not post.
 

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