"Break Up"

[OneWingedAngel]

I just finished a poem/song on Break ups and I'm gonna post it.

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Hard Part
By: Alan


I should of tried more to make it last
But now I see we just moved to fast
I couldn't help as hard as I tried
I know it hurts and your gonna cry.


I tried, I failed and, you cried
I'm sorry really I didn't meen to
I tried, I failed and, you cried


Please believe me I wouldn't hurt you
even I know ones less then two
I tried to make it last really I did
But I guess after all that I lost the bid


I tried, I failed and, you cried
I'm sorry really I didn't meen to
I tried, I failed and, you cried
I couldn't help as hard as I tried


I know your hurting so am I
It would of only worked if I lied
don't make this any harder then it is
I knows it ended and over it is


I tried, I failed and, you cried
I'm sorry really I didn't meen to
I tried, I failed and, you cried
Please don't make it any harder then it is


I had to push on had to give more
But you and I just got real bored
I couldn't fake it neither could you
I didn't want to commit and stay with you


I tried, I failed and, you cried
I'm sorry really I didn't meen to
I tried, I failed and, you cried
I know it hurts just press in a couple of weeks well forget it

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Please post exactly what yo uthin kabout it. What is wrong with it and what is good I can take it I wanna get better so I need the truth from you guys ok.

 

[Naz]

a very egocentric song (I,I,I,I,I,I and I)

but uhm, we need to know how it sounds , at least I cant judge something just by reading the txt

 

[OneWingedAngel]

Well you'll have to wait a logn time till I get my bass and I can't sing so I'll need lessons of some sort lol. So you'll just have to go from how the lyrics look and sound when you say them.

Anyways Comments/Complaints truthful ones ofcourse are still needed.

 

[Chimpbot]

Well, I can sing, sortakinda..
Doesn't really help you much, tho

 

[OneWingedAngel]

Lol thanks for telling us Chimp. When I sing I soundl ike a British guy with no teeth and I'm older then 100 years old :/ lol.

BTW: Who put ****** under my name?

 

[Chimpbot]

No clue who did that..anybody with admin status could have done that..

Anyway..
Yeah, I can sing in a few styles.....whiny, self hatred:Korn and those other "fun" bands..
Thought provokingly hard...such as Tool
Angsty...alll of those teen-angst bands..

I'm kinda flexible

 

[GhostfaceKillah]

lol, i like ur title

 

[OneWingedAngel]

Does Biki have the ability to do that? cause if so it'd prolly of been him cause he yelled at me when I sent him a PM about an FF forum hehe. Anywyas could I please have some more comments/ complaints on my lyrics.

 

[Hibiki]

thats cause ur not supost to advertize butt munch!!

 

[OneWingedAngel]

On a final note, please refrain from advertising for your mod and recruiting team members. This forum is for ESF, not your plethora of mods.

That was posted by Chimpbot.

Does it say anytihng about not advertising for sites and other forums. No it syas not for other mods and team members.

Yes we can advertise. In the rules it says NO advertising other Mods. I don't think I forum for Final Fantasy is a mod and no one else got mad over and said I was doing osmthing wrong (Which I wasn't). Geez your a mod you should know the damn rules and, I already posted the site like a week ago I was just PMing people to get the member count up on the forums. So shut up Butt Munch.

Anyways sense he's still gonna think I'm wrong could people just ignore the flaming idiot known as Hibiki and post Comments/Complaints on my Lyrical poem thing.

I think I prooved my point ;/

 

[suicidal_maniac]

I like the song, but it still has to much hatred. Like I said before it is way to easy to make a song about something bad. All your saying the whole song is how sad you are in different ways. Try just making a nice, peaceful, song.

 

[OneWingedAngel]

what? No I'm not. I'm talkign about break ups and that took me an hour to do so it wasn't easy. but fine I dunno how its depressn or anything but fine whatever I'll fix it somehow.

Thanks for the replys keep'm coming ppl

 

[Hibiki]

i posted a topic in the mods section asking about advertizeing and the answer was no advertizeing of ANY kind

 

[OneWingedAngel]

Well shouldn't they put it in the rules then? and I PMed alot of people and no one else cared I even PMed PcJoe and he didn't seem to midn thats what the PMs are for... So I dun make a thread.
So really I didn't break any rules. Wanna know why? Because it wasn't in the rules I couldn't Advertise.

 

[Hibiki]

Originally posted by Pcjoe
No advertising.

and it is in the rules fool!!!

 

[OneWingedAngel]

No it isn't he may of said that but in the WARNING anncument thing it doesn't say no Advertising if you'd read what ChimpBot posted in it you'll see.