Eh...a song

[Vegeta's Briefs]

This is to be played either on an accoustic guitar, or an electric one It isn't finished yet.

Verse 1.
I rule these grounds, I am the boss
And it's a full time occupation.
You're such a freak...
So unworthy.

Verse 2.
Someone so new, someone like you
Shouldn't break my concentration.
But you've moved me...
So unnerving.

Bridge:
It hurts to realize
These feelings are inside.
How I could look at you
And find these aches that are so new.

[CHORUS]
I've put on my crown
And torn people down
To try and escape
The love tha makes hearts break.
But you broke my stride,
Made me want to run and hide.

I only see your face, it takes up my day.
The face that has taken my breath away.


I plan on adding two more verses, and then repeat the bridge and chorus (chorus twice), and it's done. I also need to find out the chords that fit the melody that keeps repeating itself in my head.

But what do you think of it so far?

 

[Hostile]

I like it! Who are you taking your inspiration from? I'm just trying to imagine how it would sound...

the lyrics are pretty deep eh? To begin with, it sounds suspiciously like Goku and Vegeta.. hmmm ¬_¬

Gotta hear it! verbally! thru sound! audio!

 

[Engar]

It did sorta sound like Vegeta talking about Goku when I first read it through but now I think it sounds a little more like Vegeta talking about Bulma. Only VB knows though.

It's really good, please continue.

 

[Jaredster]

Looks good, i wonder what it would sound like in audio. Keep up the good work.

 

[Vegeta's Briefs]

Thanks guys ^_^

You guys don't want to hear it in audio until and unless I can get somebody else to sing it, lol. My voice is terrible.

To be perfectly honest, the inspiration came from two of my friends.

 

[Hostile]

yes, Goku and Vegeta are friends to us all.

... what?

 

[Lone Wolf]

w00t! I like it ... :yes::yes: Good job!... My likes your writing....... yea...

 

[Vegeta's Briefs]

I found my notebook, and the rest of my song. I'm not sure if I'll stick with this as the rest of it, and I still need just one line. Help please?

Verse 3.
I'll break you down to bring me up
And fix this situation
But it hurts me...
So lonely

Verse 4.
Open your arms, and keep me warm
Forget my former reputation
But it's scary...
So lovely

[Bridge:2]
The feelings are in between
It makes me want to scream
You've driven me insane,
I want to kill my brain!

[Chorus x2]




:scared: Okay...that's all for now. If you see anything wrong, point it out.

 

[USJTrunks]

I don't know, unless I know the tune, the lyrics seem like rap. I don't like rap.

 

[Vegeta's Briefs]

Lol. My friend said it sounded a bit like rap too.

 

[Legionz]

hey, I like those lyric's, nice. Good job. keep up making those. hope you eventually record them, and show us :laff:

 

[imported_mysticssjgoku4]

sounds like a hippie song no offense...... BOO TO HIPPIES

 

[Mister Satan]

hee hee they're good i like them they sound like they could be sung be placebo <they are a strange band a friend of mine likes)

but anyway its cool i like it....but what would i know im just a crazy welsh man from the hills.la la la la