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Dragon Ball F Chapter 01

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so did you make that or did you just post someone's copyrighted work?

If it's the latter you're a tool.
because I made that, when I was 3.
 
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Yeah I made that.
 
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awesome hlev! pretty funny ending
 
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Here's a tip for you: When creating black and white images (or grayscales, or anything that has less than 256 colors), save them as GIF files. Nearly no quality loss, but compressed from 1,026kb to 88kb (that's nearly 12 times smaller). There's no need to use a lossless image container for images like these. They serve only for crashing browsers and increasing loadtimes.

 
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Could some moderator change the topic's title to "Dragon Ball F"? Didn't felt like creating a separate topic for chapter 2.

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Before I give my opinion, are we allowed to be frank?
 
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The part about Chiaotzu's bombing cracked me up.
 
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DBZ never been better son, I love it!
 
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Parts of it were pretty funny. However, some sections, like the party gag, don't work as well. You're also using the f-word a little too often, a couple of minor typo's but otherwise not bad.
 
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some sections, like the party gag, don't work as well.
The party gag is long over with. I just needed it for the plot in this case. And the F-word is awesome.
 
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Chapter 3. This one is even worse!















 
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this last chapter was little soft, looks like you rushed it or smthg. Also you should put up a website for this and make millions!!!!!
 
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I still like the first one the best.
 
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this last chapter was little soft, looks like you rushed it or smthg. Also you should put up a website for this and make millions!!!!!
Yeah well, I normally do a page or two in some time, but with chapter 3 it was different. I didn't feel like continuing DBF at all until one day I decided that there must be a chapter 3, since the story came close to the "over 9000" time. TBH I wanted to put the "over 9000" at the end of the chapter 2, but there was no space and I needed something neat for chapter 3 in case I decide to do it. I actually did 10 pages + cover for chapter 3 in a single day. Yeah, that's rushed since I didn't give myself more time to think of a better plot.
For the two previous chapters, I had in mind what I'm actually doing (the plot, I mean), inserting random stuff between the planned devices. For chapter 3, it was only the "over 9000" joke that I had planned on setting up, everything else (that includes every "over 9000" joke after the first one) was pure improvisation.
I don't want DBF to totally not make sense and only rely on jokes, so I had to put these non-battle/peace scenes to get readers an idea of what's going on. However it's more difficult to make such scenes funny, or it would take too many pages, and I'm trying to make almost every page consist of something funny. What I find funny may not be funny to others, though. Especially if they're not too familiar with DB and heavily discussed things amongst its fans. That's the problem.
In any case I'm pretty satisfied with how the chapter 3 turned out. I read it myself a few times to check, and I believe it did have what I wanted for it to have. Some people actually liked chapter 3 more than the first two. Some of my ideas didn't fit into 14 pages (just like the "over 9000" didn't fit into chapter 2), so I guess chapter 4 is confirmed.

BTW, the "over 9000" joke didn't die with the 3rd chapter.
 
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this story is interesting, I love it how you skip stuff, make moar!
 
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Mini-Picollo and Troll Gohan are best.
 

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