DBZ Sequential

[Thoee]

Hi guys,

Here's an unfinished sequential page of DBZ I drew to practice manga.
It still needs work on the backgrounds and effects.
Please tell what you think of it.

Take care

http://www.angelfire.com/anime4/thoee/Sequence.jpg
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[SwordMaster]

umm needs alot of work, but you did a good job on the body'es
Looks like the real manga

 

[D.C. Darkling]

LOL.

going into the right way.

 

[SierraSonic]

this is what I like to to see from a n00.... from a person who is new to the forums. Nice Job!!!

 

[TonyMontana]

Looks pretty good, just needs some fixing up.

 

[Hibiki]

very good...

but i would change the first frame cause it doesnt really follow with whats going on... and the gohan in the last frame looks more like vegeta...


and use a ruler to make the lines... not hard doesnt take long and makes it look alot better...

 

[Chimpbot]

The first frame is fine....Gohan's just searching for Goten's ki

One other thing..
if you had drawn it in true manga style..it would flow from right to left..
japanese is read from right to left....their comics flow from right to left

when they translate them, sometime's they "flop" them, so they read from left to right, like we're used to.

But...the true manga style is right to left.

 

[Judge]

is that true?? i thought only the hebrew guys read from right 2 left.

 

[TonyMontana]

Yes that is true.

 

[Deverz]

does that mean they read from back to front?

 

[DiebytheSword]

Technically no, it just means the binding is on the other side Dev.

(If it were an english book, it would look like the front cover was on the back)

 

[Thoee]

Thanx for looking at it you guys.
I know about Gohan looking like Vegeta, I'll fix it soon.
Here's a 'neater version':

http://www.angelfire.com/anime4/thoee/Sequencesmall.jpg
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[greentaco]

I really like that. That's the right amount of detail for a very good storyboard. Good work. How long did it take you?

 

[ph34r t3h Cute]

thats very good! very good indeed

 

[Hibiki]

but u know u could see it as traditional style... i mean look at it.. i could pass as flowing in both directions...



and i would use http://www.targethosting.com instead of anglecrap

its free and they dont replace pics with crapy logos >_<

 

[Thoee]

Thanx you all like it :laff:.
It took me about an hour to draw it.
And thanx for the website hibiki, I'll certainly will try it.

 

[Hibiki]

well it is a very cool piece of art....