Broken

[Enix]

She cant hide it no matter
how hard she tries,
she gasps for air
and continues to cry

She feels all alone
like no one is there,
shes been hurt but
no one cares

She wonders why shes
all alone but the answer is
hidden in her own

She is broken, unfixable,
and she is has awoken

Well, its my first try at this dark art stuff. C&C please.

 

[Xenogias]

Well its not so bad... though it looks like she literally has no hair (^_^') Im just being supportive, but its good.

 

[Amitron]

I get a feeling from the poem that i don't see in the image. Meh.

 

[Enix]

well its kinda a subliminal message. [to tell you the truth i did this at 3 in the morning]

Edit*
and about the hair thing, i left a faint white line around the left side of her head [right side from the front], just so you could see her hair.

 

[TimTheEnchantor]

Texture seems to be just "laid" on and blended to conform to the figure.. I can tell you did this at 3 am..lol.

 

[Alteh]

Texture seems to be just "laid" on and blended to conform to the figure.. I can tell you did this at 3 am..lol.

ya, just laid down and simple


...what about ours?

 

[TimTheEnchantor]

Mine? did you mean "yours" or "ours"

Mine conforms to the figure. I don't just lay texture on.