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The face needs to be fixed up a little bit. The right side breast is quite big and pointing straight. Maybe cut back on the hair it looks to big and bushy. Give the girl some pupils in the eyes. Fix up the thumb a but so it looks like a thumb its pretty narrow. Add some angle in here wrists it looks like her hand starts no where. Like a deep curve in or something. and I think thats all. Good job all around Nighthawk.
 
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Ok, I adjusted some of the things you mentioned (hopefully :p) But the hair stays!! :) It's supposed to be funky like that ;) (You'll find out later maybe...but if you look at the drawing, you might be able to guess it)
 
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:yes:

impressed ;) only thing that bugs me is the hair, the hairstyle is good..but its pointing back a bit too much. its too 'long' dunno how to clearify myself better. ;)

overall: good job
 
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It's really not that bad other than some parts of the face.
 
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Cheekbone on left side is almost too low. Might be fixed by fixinig the eyes.

Lips are too crooked, reel that smirk in a bit.

Eyes need to wrap around the head, they look too 2d ATM.

Same problem with her bangs.

Her left elbow needs to be thinner where it bends, try curving the forarm lines to show the forearm as a part of the arm, not Buu in jelly fish mode.

Not a flame, just observations. Really, REALLY nice clothes though.
 
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There are too many unnessaccary creases in the trousers.

Maybe curve the front of the hair a little


Nice job :)
 
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Cucumba beat me to it. What he said was really all that I noticed. Those are really nice clothes... :)
 
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Well, I tried to follow y'alls suggestions



Though I'm not sure what or how to "wrap" her eyes and bangs around her head :cry: And it's supposed to be a really mean smirk so....:p

BTW, when's the next art contest happening?
 
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What we mean by wrapping her eyes around her face is to give it more depth, make the eye curve off so it doesn't look like her eye just ends right where it is.
 
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Originally posted by [ESF]nighthawk
Well, I tried to follow y'alls suggestions



Though I'm not sure what or how to "wrap" her eyes and bangs around her head :cry: And it's supposed to be a really mean smirk so....:p

BTW, when's the next art contest happening?
Your line is straight on her left eye.

You can do 2 things. 1, you can make the lines slightly angled (up near the outsides of the face). 2, you can make the lines on top and bottom slightly elliptical, defeating the 2d effect you made.
 

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