noob wants a one round battle with some one

i am a noob and would like a quick fight to see what it is like
ill take on any body (hopefuly another noob)

ok im up for the fight since this will be my first battle here ok now all we need is a ref

ref needed over here

I'll referee this match, the venue is the esf_cell_day map inside ESF, and the battle will take place DBZ style. Let the smack talk begin, and then proceed to your first round.

Good luck.

hey man this gonna be too easy see that spike over there on the corner of thins arnea any one u dicide thats were you will end up
also dont worry ( ill go easy for the mean while)
so which spike is it?

well ur gonna die plain and simple but first im going to toy with you and then kill you

gpas = me
durgon =nagaking (he requset that name)

gpas was sitting round the table with his mates
on the table infront of him stood a half emty bottle of jim beam
and a equley emty bottle of coke
they all were having a good time listing to cypress hill
then gpas grabed the bottle and started to drink
he mates stoped a started as a weard blue mist srounded him
BOOF and with a flash he was gone

WHACK he landed on the cell areana
he noted to him self how the achohol softed his fall
gpas look around to see some aproching him
"whats this then aye" exclamed gpas
"this oh it only the place were you will die"replyed durgon
"that so is it"said gpas as he walked forward

durgon was now right infornt of gpas he took one swing at gpas
caught him right in the left cheak which then spin him three times
before durgon kick him in to the ground
this knocked gpas to his senses gpas got back up
he was amazed at the strenght durgon struck with
gpas the let out a brust of 15 punches to durgons cheast 8 were
knocked away 7 were dodged
durgon cam back with a left hook but was sucsefuly blocked
BAM
but a right hook topled gpas but when spiningdown to the
geound left a beam fly to push him self in to the air
then as he floted he propled a ki ball towards durgon who
just teleported past it and caouth gpas with a kick to the head
sending him in to the arena

when the dust cleard gpas was standing not laying but standing with
his head lowerd durgon aproched slowly but gpas did noting
durgon went to kick gpas in the face but gpas blocked with a right fore arm
as durgon landed gpas went for a punch but his vison fadded
it was a flash back to when he was a third form and a foth form had beten him up
he punched the forth former and as the forth former lowerd in pain upercated him in the face
he vison faded back gpas saw durgon in the sam place ans the forth form
had been in the end of his flash back laying on the ground holding his face
gpas then kicked durgon into one of the spikes snapping it in to two
"well that narrows down your chioces" says gpas angily

durgon was to hurt to move so gpas grabed him by the neck
but with out waring durgon teleported to about 20meters above the arena
gpas folowed and slemd a foot in to the back of his head wich sent durgon
fling ing to a cliff and with a louad wack bounced off and laned in the arnea
there was no movemnt foe a whole 10 gpas though he must be dead so he flew down
to durgon
"to bad i have to chose now"said gpas
and with grabed durgons limp out cold body a with a little trow
thew durgon above a sipke and the slamed him in to it

Durgon looked at his opponent studing his opponent he was said his opponents name was gpas what ever kinda of half breed saiyian name was that but it didnt matter as long as he was defeated thats all that mattered he looked at the ground and a large rumble began Durgon let out a large yell that echoed for miles rocks were thrown in the air and durgons muslces began to twitch and he felt his battle spirit coming into fold but when he looked to see his opponent he didnt see anything he looked up in the sky only to see a green beam coming right at him his timing was bad and he wasnt fast enough to jump out of the way the beam hit and a large explosion was seen through the eyes of gpas but then out of the smoke durgon flew he gave gpas a quick punch to the face and then jumped back and shot a small energy ball at the chest of gpas but with great speed his opponent dodged it an appeared in front of durgon and gave him a quick knee-jab to the stomach but durgon recovered quickly and the two began throwing punches and kicks at each other there speed was an awsoem sight as they flew every where across the arena large explosions of energy flying out of them with every punch and kick then both of them flew back Durgon landed in the middle of the arena and then laughed he narrowed his eyes on gpas and said "well for a half breed you sure a strong but im afraid you just cant beat me" and with that he flew at his opponent but before he landed a hit he dissapeared and then appeared behind gpas his two hands put together above his head he swung down landing a hit on his opponents head sending him down at a very fast speed but before gpas hit the ground he recovered and jumped rigth back at Durgon with incrediable speed and force durgon did not expect this and was smashed in the jaw by a strong punch and then punched in the stomach he then flew back from the force but felt a great pain in his back and he yelled out it was gpas with his knee in Durgon's back gpas then jumped infront of him and clutched his wrist with his other hand and gave a great cry an energy ball flew out of his hand straight at Durgon but this time he was ready with great force he smashed it back at gpas and then jumped backwards and began to put his hand in the air he then stopped when his hand was up to his heads height a large blue energy ball formed and was flung rigth at gpas it stopped just a few inches away and then began to fire small energy beams straight at gpas these hit him with great speed and made him cry out while this was happening Durgon went to the side of gpas
and yelled with great might "GOOD BYE HALF BREED YOUR DISGRACE WONT MATTER MUCH LONGER" A noise was heard it was like a beam about to fire it became louder and then it stopped all that was heard was a loud explosion and the Dulgor flew down to the middle of the arena and took a deep breath,but then he gasped and saw his opponent fly right down and land a few meters infront of him Durgon astonished by his foes great strength and endurance stumbled back but then regained his senses he laughed and the got into a squat like stanse his veins began to pop and his muscles tensed he did not say anything though but then behind him the two spikes lifted out of the ground and pointed to gpas they came at him with amazing speed gpas shot an energy ball at one and destroyed it but wasnt quick enough to destroy the next one he just barely dodged it and then jumped back as if in slow motion Durgon laughed then said "Your going to impale me hey half breed" Then all that was heard was the sound of a gurgling yell as gpas was impaled by the spike that had just barely missed him for when he was jumping back it had turned around and it had been coming back at him this sealed his own fate and the victor was Durgon

Ok I'm going to be flat out honest here. Writing in understandable english is always a better way to get an upper hand, and neither of you did that. :|

Gpas wrote like a poem without rhymes or proper spelling, and nagaking wrote a 100 line sentence without any punctuation at all...

This round goes to negaking because his fight was DBZ themed as mentioned, and was also technically a better story than gpas. But you should try and have a neutral amount of damage for both sides in your story - gpas did well in that area.

Let's hope we all do better in the second round, which begins now.

As Durgon was about to fly away he heard a noise from behind him he turned and then smiled gpas was off the spike holding his shoulder breathing heavily durgon said with a very angry voice "why...why...WHY WONT YOU JUST DIE" And with that he ran at gpas but somehow missed he jumped back,but then flew up in the air he looked around his teeth grinding and his eyes filled with rage then he turned his head and saw gpas flying at him the two locked hands and an aura was formed from both of them both of there bodies became tense but durgon could not understand why did he feel like he was getting beaten what was this it couldnt be fear,he then yelled and kneed gpas in the stomach and then gave him a few punches in the face before his next attack was blocked by gpas and then he was given a swift kick to the ribs and then head butted Durgon in the head blood came out of Durgon as he flew backward but then regained control and blocked his opponents uppercut with is two hands and then kicked gpas in the face and then gave him a punch in the stomach the two began to attack each other very fast, Durgon jumped back and then dissapeared gpas looked around with hesitation,but then Durgon appeared behind behind gpas and clutched on to his opponenets wounded should squeezing hard gpas yelled in pain and elbowed Durgon in the chest,but Durgon continued to hold he then put his two arms around gpas and squeezed him with all his strength gpas did not know how much time past but he could not stand it he summoned enough energy to blow back Durgon off of him,he turned around and gave him a kick and then uppercutted him in the chin Durgon stumbled back and then began to laugh "Well i must say you are quite the fighter but i would love to test your energy attack" Durgon flew up higher in the air and put his two hands together he then began to yell down at his opponenet who was flying at him with amazing speed "Well it seems you dont want to show off your energy attacks but it doesnt matter once your dead say good bye half breed" Durgon let out his attack with a great yell "BEAST BEAM" The blue energy beam came down at gpas its power radiating from it gpas stopped and put his hands in the air and flew at the beam he came into contact with it and managed to stop it for a few seconds but then began to get pushed back,he had to think of something fast or else he would be doomed he let go of the energy beam and then jumped out of its way and appeared to the side of Durgon and punched him in the face Durgon lost the power to sustain the beam and the great beam dissapeared he was kicked in the stomach and then in the cheeck but retaliated and then flew away hoping for gpas to follow but he turned his head and saw gpas in front of him,smiling with anticipation Durgon clenched his fist and swung at his opponent but his attack was countered by a knee in the stomach Durgon jumped back but was hammered down by the fast gpas he hit the ground and tried to get up but his back was met by gpas's feet which had been coming at him at amzing speed gpas then jumped off Durgon's back and kicked him in the ribs he began beating at him for five minutes but then backed off and began to sweat everything seemed to like he was looking through fire everything became hazy he finally realized it was the energy flowing into Durgon gpas realized what was going to happen and started flying away on the ground Durgon was yelling and his eyes were turing red his muscles began to pump and sweat came from Durgons body he got up and looked at the retreating gpas,as wind past his beaten face gpas looked behind him to see if he was getting followed he smiled as he saw nobody was behind him he looked infront and flew back his nose broken,Durgon stood there showing no sign of expression he lunged at gpas and punched him in the ribs,a shattering sound was heared gpas yelled in pain,Durgon appeared behind gpas's back and then elbowed it with great force he then grabbed his opponenets arm and threw him at the arena gpas hit the ground but kept on going finally he stopped he couldnt move and he felt worried he heard a noise behind him and was then picked up he saw the face of Durgon it was scary for some reason the face seemed to have no pity, no remorse, no pain then with a quick strike gpas was punched in the face and landed in the middle of the arena gasping for air he saw Durgon flying off in the distance.

this carries on from durgon’s story

as durgon turned to walk away a ki blast narrowly missed his head
"gpas was still alive but how" he thought to him self as he turned around
then with out warring gpas started to ascended to ssj this made durgon let fly
a beam at gpas which was knocked away by the immense power around him
durgon then swooped on gpas with a assault of kick and punches which before
would have nailed gpas to a cliff but still nothing happened durgon was getting worried
gpas let out a big burst of power which knocked durgon over and broke the pillar on
which he was impaled

gpas let out a final burst of energy signaling the he had finished his transformation
this worried durgon but did nothing to stop his determination which was proved when
he attacked with a big bang attack which hit gpas directly in the chest and sent him flying
“your not that improved” yelled durgon as he cased after gpas flying body as he neared it he realized gpas had an evil grin on and just at that moment durgon was stricken with complete fear which was shaken of as he stopped just when gpas hit a cliff

gpas was in the cliff side for a good 5 seconds before he lunged out and went all out with a combo of punches and kicks at durgon who was not fast enough and took every single hit this weakened him greatly but did not K.O him durgon was very limp but still was able to launch another attack on gpas which still had no effect as gpas just backhanded him in to a cliff which durgon bounced off

as durgon started to fall he was slammed in to the cliff by gpas who had grabbed him by the neck
“how dear you impale me” shouted gpas
“to bad it wasn’t enough” replied durgon
gpas felt something on his chest as he looked to see what it was a beam burst out from it and though his body this drained his energy enough for gpas to have to descend from ssj
and back off

durgon went to kick gpas in the face but missed and gpas grabbed his foot and threw him to the ground and he landed on one of the reaming pillars

gpas then landed on the ground and sat down his body was sore all over

/me looks at nagaking... guess someone wrote another 100-line sentence, eh? *takes paracetamol*

This round goes to Gpas, because his story was clean and simple and also relating to the DBZ style of fighting this time. As opposed to this, Nagaking's post dragged on randomly - which is what gave him negative points.

Last round - he who wins this round, also wins this match. Best of luck, gents.

Durgon realizing he was about to fall on the spiked pillar quickly regained his controll and slowly desended on the spike piller and balanced there with one leg,he looked at gpas and was astonished that he had become a super saiyian in such a short battle, but he did not let this catch his attention he knew he would not win in speed or power so he would have to use his smarts to win the battle he noticed that gpas had been a strong opponent and was now all but impossible to beat in the form Durgon was in right now,but he got a thought remembering when he and another team where on a planet one had summoned a great energy ball and threw it in the air which had all turned them into there great ape forms,Durgon smilied and licked his lips,he slowly desended with the energy ball growing in his hands he let out a laugh and then licked his lips once more he began talking to himself "Once i turn into my form he wont be able to stop me i will crush him" Durgon looked at the energy ball and threw it in the air it stopped about 8km above them.Durgon stared at it his heart began to beat faster now, sweat poured down him, his muscles began to grow he himself was also growing and his face was become narrower and growing large canines, fur began to grow all over his body and he could feel a great power surging through him,finally after a few minutes his transformation was complete, Durgon lunged at gpas who was caught off guard by this creautres great speed but he managed to jumped out of the way, as he did this Durgon swung up with his mighty fist but was still to slow, the great creature stamped around the arena with his feet trying to crush gpas but continued to miss roaring after every miss. He turned as he saw gpas dissapear but he did not know that was a trick and gpas had just quickly went back to his original position which was below Durgon, gpas charged a large energy attack and launched it at the chest of Durgon wwho had only just realized that he was soaring through the air, when the explosion occured all that was seen was an enraged Durgon appearing through the smoke,gpas jumped out of the way but was punched by the giant Ape's hand, gpas flew back but soon found himself through mass waves of pain as Durgon held him with two giant hands squeezing the body of gpas, but he let go of the warrior as the golden hair faded into its normal hair colour and the large muscles became normal again, the body fell to the arena floor gasping for air and then finally calmed, Durgon who was now become a normal Saiyian was already laughing as the last bit of fur dissapeared, but as he walked the ruined body of gpas stood up with a smile on his face and he said "I may be out of my powerful for but i can still beat you scum" as he said that he lunged at DUrgon a green aura around him, his ist made contact with Durgons chin and sent him flying in the air but Durgon regained control just as his opponent kneed him in the chest, gpas pointed two fingers at Durgons face and shot a lethal beam at his eye, Durgon screamed in pain as he flew back and then was kicked down to the ground, as that happened gpas made a slow mocing energy ball fly toward Durgon and then dissapeared to the arena floor and shot another energy ball at durgon, but before the two collided Durgon dissapeared and rammed his two feet right into gpas's face sending him skidding across the arena, but before he could stop he was kicked in the face by Durgon who then unleashed a barrage of fire at gpas. Durgon smiled he had done his job well done as he turned he sensed an great ammount of power coming at him he flew up in te air an was greated by gpas's fist which smaked him clean in the nose and which were also followed by many more punches in the face as these happened the almost beaten gpas yelled angrly "You are nothing but a monkey i will do this to you untill you die" and then gave Durgon a quick punch to the gut Durgon laughed and mocked "So you call me a monkey when you yourslef are a half breed" He flew towards gpas and punched him in the face then quickly gave him a hard knee in the stomach which was then followed by a hammering blow to the top of gpas's head which sent his body flying down and landing with such forcethat it caused the area around him to sink in the now enraged gpas made a great energy ball and flew up out of the crater and hovered there then smiled and threw the energy ball straight at Durgon who dissapeared and then appeared infront of gpas and gave him a swift kick to the head and then jumped behind the energy ball and punched it back to gpas who now began to regain his focus but was then kneed in the back, as the energy ball grew closer Durgon jumped out of the way just before it hit gpas who was burnt and beaten by the explosion of the great ball after the smoke settled gpas lay there shaking on the ground but as he began to fade out of reality he said to durgon "I will get you one day Ape" as this happened a kick to his rib by Durgon knocked him out cold.It was a hard day for Durgon and he flew away back into the wild to train for the day that someone more powerful would meet him in battle.

Continues from my second one

Gpas sat for a while allowing his strength to re gain
“he went harder than I thought” said gpas
at that moment a sharp piercing noise hit his ears
durgon was screaming as he regained conciseness and found what had happened
gpas would have walked back but was knocked over instead by durgon who teleported off the spike gpas landed with a thud!! And rolled just in time miss a foot to the head
gpas leapt to his feet and went to punch durgon but was gutted when durgon had dodged it and then cracked him in the gut
it was shattering it felt as if he had broken all his ribs in one punch
then he noticed durgon had ascended to ssj

they fought on for a bit trading punches and blows for a couple of minutes still none of these had any effect on durgon but gpas was taking a beating he did not know how much longer he could hold out for but then durgon stopped ssj had been putting to much stress on his body and he descended which then gave gpas his opportunity to strike or so he thought

gpas took the chance and let out one of the hardest punches he could it hit durgon in the face but no effect
“have I been weakened that much” thought gpas to him self but durgon saw that his punch had no effect and carried on the attack of gpas until gpas had an idea

the fight was brutal gpas taking heavy blows but once and a while durgon got hurt by a beam or two as durgon took a swing gpas dodged and grabbed be hind durgon and held him in submission gpas be gain to glow blue and a heavy mist formed around him durgon sensed immense amount of power and the with out warning there was a deafening BANG

gpas opened his eyes and was standing on snake way with kami
“you have earned the right to train with kink kai” said kami
“did it work though” asked gpas
“yes your self destruction was enough to kill durgon but un like you he does not get his body back” replied kami
and with that gpas started off down snake way

Without further ado, the winner of this final round and match is Gpas. Well done!

Nagaking, it seems you didn't take my hints after each of the first two rounds. You lose a lot of points because of your inability to express your story in a manner which is actually worth-while for the reader. Typing up a 100-line sentence blindly really spoils the fun. >:E

And I liked Gpas's ending better, and his story was short and sweet and much more understandable. Good fight, gentlemen.

/me takes some more paracetamol... oh the headache -_-

Nagaking, you are now to give reputation points to Gpas. And Gpas, you may give negative reputation points to Nagaking if you wish. You are also free to write up a fatality/finishing paragraph - although you have already killed Nagaking in your story.

ahem. sorry to butt-in but he cant give a fatality to the opponent unless he has 20 rep points over his opponnent.

btw gj gpas

aaaaahh i cant belive this i tried and yet i still failed ack i must have used to many big words well i want a ramatch one round only plus wasnt Durgn turning into an ape interesting i descrbed everything alot is that good or bad give me some hints here

nagaking, grOOvy told you exactly what was wrong several times...

Ok I'm going to be flat out honest here. Writing in understandable english is always a better way to get an upper hand, and neither of you did that. :|

Gpas wrote like a poem without rhymes or proper spelling, and nagaking wrote a 100 line sentence without any punctuation at all...

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/me looks at nagaking... guess someone wrote another 100-line sentence, eh? *takes paracetamol*

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Nagaking, it seems you didn't take my hints after each of the first two rounds. You lose a lot of points because of your inability to express your story in a manner which is actually worth-while for the reader. Typing up a 100-line sentence blindly really spoils the fun. >:E

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I would highly recommend against a long run-on sentence in your future endeavors and possibly even paragraphs.

ok thnx man i read my 2nd and 3rd story as well and i figured out where i messed up i got a new story all in my head and stuff i also had a headache for the 3rd one tylenol doesnt work just to let you guys know but anyway thnx for the help hopefully he will respond to my new thread for a rematch muhahahaha....hahaha

good match nagaking (it was fun)
im gonna work on skill
im merceful i leave you rep alone nagaking