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Due to an acute lack of creativity for my round against SA_Gohan, I accept this challenge .
 

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And I will ref, the venue is a manhatten skyscraper, However, Kelesk is not here just for a mere fight...Akago owns the building in which you are fighting in, Kelesk's objective is to obtain Akago's prized possession, a dagger taken from an Aztec ruins long ago...and is said to give the bearer unusual abilities, the dagger is held in Akago's office in the top floor. Security/personnel of the building is optional to the contenders.

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(Er, office? That doesn't really fit with my bio... oh well. Whatever floats your boat. You're the judge.)

Take a good look at these hands. These hands are stained with blood; the blood of a thousand opponents who have faced me before. And they all died by my hands... as will you today. Your legacy will be nothing more than a red smear in my palm. Come now, face your master!
 
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There is only one master of the Spectral Warrior pest and you are not even worthy of evelvating yourself to his level. Those blood stained hands will only be stained with the blood of yourself and your fellow comrades when I am done clearing each and everyone one of you from this building. The Rogue Scythe, will be empowered.
 
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And hereby, I proudly present my version of round 1. Sorry for the delay; I needed some time to work out the basic elements.

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Akago let out a sigh of disapproval, as he had done many times before.

This wasn’t his style. He had been stuck in this one place for the last three months and it sickened him.

For years he had yearned to return to Japan once more. See the neon-lit streets of Tokyo, enjoy the hot springs of Hokkaido, stuff like that. It had taken him a veritable eternity to take the time to plan the trip. Just as he was finally about to board the plane, his anonymous “employer” contacted him. “We need you to kill a certain man,” he said. “You will remain in New York City. Our contact there will provide you with the info necessary for the mission.”

These were most definitely not the words Akago had wanted to hear just before he was going on his trip.

And so Akago had been ordered to pose as some wealthy businessman who ranked high on the hitlist of whoever it was he was supposed to kill, in order to draw the guy to him. His employer’s contact had given to him a small, black briefcase with a numbered lock. “Keep this safe,” he had said. “This belongs to our client, and he would be pretty upset if it were lost.”

Akago had no idea what was so important about the briefcase, nor did he really care. During the three months that had passed, the briefcase had remained hidden in a safe in the office where Akago conducted his “business”, and for the full duration of the three months it had remained there, undisturbed.

And, disappointingly enough, for the full three months Akago had taken on this little charade, there had been no sign whatsoever of someone making a threat against his life.

Akago took another draw of his cigarette. He blew out the smoke in another sigh of disapproval. How much longer was he gonna have to be stuck here? Even having his nanites pump endorphins into his bloodstream 24/7 didn’t make him any happier.

“Who is this psycho they wanted me to kill, anyway? And what’s taking him so damn long?” Akago loudly asked himself.

The day ended as every other. Akago spent the remaining evening in his hotel room, watching his copy of Zatoichi for the umpteenth time before going to sleep.

However, as mundane as the day had been, the night couldn’t be any more different. For that night, Akago dreamt…

He was standing in a dark void. All around him was complete darkness.

Then suddenly, a shadowy figure slowly moved towards him.

Slowly, the figure became visible. He was muscled, and had spiky red hair. Akago glanced at the person’s shoulders; they were covered with a thin layer of ice.

Akago then noticed the anonymous fighter carried a large scythe in his right hand.

The two stared at each other for a few seconds, when suddenly, Akago’s opponent unexpectedly swung his scythe. With his lightning-fast reflexes, Akago quickly reacted and blocked the swing with his right arm, which he had quickly covered in nano-armor. Sparks flew as the scythe struck the synthetic alloy. The blow was unexpectedly powerful, Akago discovered, as his arm was quickly pushed back. He knew his opponent possessed great strength, and thus he had to be swiftly taken care of, Akago thought.

He rapidly drew his arm back a bit, and mentally commanded his nanites to form his trusty nano-blade. A fraction of a second later, Akago swung the mighty sword that had appeared out of thin air in his right hand towards his opponent, who was caught off guard by this unexpected turn of events and received a deep cut above his right eye. Then, Akago quickly aimed the blaster pistol he formed in his left hand while he had swung his sword at his opponent’s head and pulled the trigger.

A blinding flash followed as the blast enveloped the scythe-bearer. Akago squinted with his eyes as he leaped away, while firing another volley at his opponent. The blinding light lit up the entire room, as the mighty warrior was instantly vaporized by the blast. A loud explosion followed, and when the light had faded, so had the scythe-bearer.

Akago quickly withdrew his weapons as they were disassembled back into nanites. He was breathing heavily; it had taken a lot of effort to block that scythe, and the nanites had drawn a significant amount of energy from him as well.

Suddenly, without warning, the unknown warrior materialized behind Akago, who was taken completely by surprise. The scythe-bearer immediately lifted the scythe above his head and swung, letting out a furious yell.

The attack came too sudden for Akago to react in time, as his weariness slowed him down significantly. The scythe sliced straight through his shoulder and took his left arm off. Akago screamed out in pain as his severed limb dropped to the floor. Blood splattered all over where Akago stood. The scythe-bearer revealed a devilish grin.

The nanites inside his body immediately got to work to do whatever they could with what little energy Akago had left. Unfortunately, the blood loss had taken a great deal of energy, and all that was left for them to do was cauterize the wound as best as they could with the remaining energy.

The scythe-bearer vanished and reappeared in front of Akago, who now stood hunched over, cradling his wounds, gasping for air. The mighty warrior was still grinning, even though the cut above his right eye still bled.

Akago took one fearful breath after another. How was he gonna get out of this jam? His nanites were out of power, so forming any weapons whatsoever was completely out of the question.

“This guy… he’s unbelievable.” Akago thought to himself. “But I can’t give up now. I’ve gotten out of worse jams than this.”

Desperately, Akago attempted one last attack against his opponent. He rushed towards him, pulled back his remaining arm, and, yelling out loud, swung.

For some reason, the scythe-bearer did not see this coming. Even stranger now was that Akago punched straight through his scythe, shattering it, and hit the mighty warrior right in the face. The scythe-bearer gasped, as he fell backwards, struggling to keep his footing.

Suddenly, a crack formed where Akago had hit the scythe-bearer. It quickly spread across his face, riddling it with cracks. The cracks rapidly spread to the rest of his body as well.

The scythe-bearer then quickly reached out towards Akago, but his fingers suddenly fell to pieces, then his hand, then his whole arm. He gazed at his other hand in shock as it too fell to pieces. The warrior collapsed right before Akago’s eyes like an egg shell.

Akago stared at the pieces, unable to comprehend what was going on.

Suddenly, the pieces started to stir. Rapidly they were putting themselves back together, forming the scythe-bearer’s head. He gazed at Akago with the same devilish grin on his face as when he had relieved him of his left arm.

“See you in hell,” the head spoke, after which it collapsed again.

Akago slowly stepped away from the rubble, gasping fearfully, and then screamed in terror.

And then he woke up.

He was sitting upright in bed, sweat pouring down every inch of his body, breathing heavily. He quickly looked down; his left arm was still attached.

The images were quickly slipping away; all but the gruesome image of the near-demise he suffered at the hands of the unknown warrior…

Akago wondered what this meant. Was this a premonition of things to come? Or were his unconscious fears playing tricks on him?

Akago would find out the answer soon enough.

For when he arrived at the skyscraper where he had gone to work all this time for the last three months, he found that something terrible had happened. Smoke came from the top, and broken glass and rubble covered every square inch of the street.

“Holy mother of God.” Akago softly exclaimed, staring at the carnage.

Akago quickly ran into the building. The elevator was not working because the fire alarm had been triggered. He quickly rushed up the stairs to the fourtieth floor, where his office was.

Upon arriving, Akago found someone standing in his office, the suitcase that had been locked in the safe in his left hand. In his right hand he carried a scythe…

He turned towards Akago, showing him a devilish grin.

Akago was overcome by fear…

This was the same warrior he fought in his dream.

Akago’s fear quickly turned into determination. Determination to defeat his foe.

He formed a blaster pistol in his hand and pointed it at the scythe-bearer.

“Drop it, needle noggin!” Akago barked.

If his opponent was as strong as he suspected, the trip to Japan was out of reach for even longer than he had originally planned.
 
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It had begun many decades ago now, the blade that Akago had found in the Aztec ruins all that time ago, the power he possessed but never realised it, the power contained within that dagger.

The twilight darkness began to loom over Manhattan the first few stars coming into clear view of the hustling people below the towering skyscrapers that littered the city but in the streets below, there was a war beginning.

Akago’s monstrous building was on the corner of 7th Ave and 42nd Street and was roughly the 5th tallest building in the city, across the street police cars barricaded the outside of a bank doubled up with civilian onlookers as a robbery was in progress. All officers had their guns drawn and aimed towards the door as the police chief spoke into a megaphone.

“Come out with your hands up and we will not harm you.”

From inside the bank a muffled voice called back; none of the officers outside heard exactly what had been said, some quickly glancing at each other in case someone did hear. Again the chief spoke sternly into the megaphone, this time less peacefully.

“This is your last warning, come out with your hands up or we will be forced to take action!”

This quote was abruptly followed by one single gunshot, the tinted outside windows of the bank cloaking everything that happened within. A few seconds later a body was thrown from the door of the bank every officer tightening his grip on his weapon focusing on an injured female, early twenties; blood pouring from her lower torso. She had been shot in the kidney faintly stumbling around before dropping to the ground dead. A few officers were ordered to go and rescue her, two of the three fetching shields and shielding the third as they slowly walked over to the woman, as they reached her several more gunshots were fired at the officers from the inside, hitting the shields, one stray hitting one of the officers that was taking cover behind one of the police cars in the neck. The officer dropped to the ground gurgling and writhing around in pain clenching his bleeding neck as a small pool of blood began to seep from underneath his head. Then all hell broke loose.

“Man down! Man down!”

“Officer down!”

A few officers returned fire but were quickly ordered to cease fire by the chief, instructing them that civilians were still in the bank. Another three shots were randomly fired from inside the bank, all officers outside now taking cover behind the police vehicles, the rescue team dragging the woman off and taking her to the paramedics, who quickly tried to save her.

Outside the Akago building stood one man in a fluster of scrambling people who were running from the potentially deranged gunman inside the bank; his red hair easily standing out in the huge cluster of panicked bystanders. As the crowed thinned to nothing the gunman saw the red haired man and fired one shot before his .9mm clicked open, dropping the empty clip on the floor and loading in a fresh one. The bullet in reality slowed to a halt, the officers outside the bank knew who it had been fired at but none could react quick enough to do anything, one beginning to yell a warning before the man’s head jolted forward from the impact of the bullet, yet no blood sprayed from his forehead. Slowly the man’s head rose back to where it had originally been, the bullet tapping as it fell to the cold pavement below. Awestruck the officers and gunman stood staring at the red headed man who was still standing, slowly turning his head to the source of the bullet. Eventually his vision was centered through the very hole in the glass the bullet had come through, staring through it for what seemed like a minute but what was only a few seconds before the man seemingly threw his arm around towards where he was staring. As his hand passed the very line he was staring at an orange glaive flew from the palm of his hand, flying through the glass and hitting the gunman in the top right section of his head, before embedding itself in a wall and dissipating into a fine black dust.

Every officer saw the glaive, staring at the mirrored glass of the bank. A few seconds passed before anything actually happened. Where the glaive had passed through the glass it had cut a bigger hole but that had been the extent of it, until the glass around it slightly cracked. Within a second the glass exploded into the bank as if a shockwave had hit the window sending small shards of glass flying dangerously into the bank, one large shard lodging itself into the robbers head. Beside him a hostage was taking cover behind a table, cowering with his hands over his head facing the ground only to hear a strange sound ‘slap’ on the ground in front of him before hearing a solid thud follow. Opening one eye he saw the robber, a section of his head cut open and his brains in a bloody pool which was growing larger with every passing second. In front of him, the cut off section of the robber’s head, a few small pieces of brain lying within it and large patches of blood spotted around it. One unfortunate hostage had been unable to take safe cover and lay on the floor several feet away from the robber, her bleeding body shredded and impaled by shards of glass. Paramedics and police rushing into the bank to do what little they could.

The man turned back around and continued eyeing each guard that was in the Akago building, watching what each was doing and interpreting their future actions. Each guard was armed with an SMG and all had the same dark glasses on, the whole place looked as if it were a mafia hideout or something very much alike. One of the four guards that stood at the main entrance raised a finger and placed it over his ear-piece for a minute before walking over to another two guards and began speaking to them.

There was no easy way in through any method other than indiscreet, all Kelesk had planned in his mind had just been shot to pieces, just as he was intending on being if he ended up in front doorway wielding a chaotic super weapon. So he began to think of a newer approach.

At the top level of the gigantic complex stood Akago, staring out through one of the huge windows over the city. He could sense that there wasn’t something quite right, but he couldn’t pin what it was. He slowly closed his eyes and let the questions run through his mind. Letting his idle senses answer what they could.

Why is there something wrong, why do I feel so insecure all of a sudden?

--becauseyouchoosenottoacceptthefactthatyouareentirelysafehere--

But what if there really is something wrong?

--nothingiswrong--

No there has to b--


At that exact moment, all lights in and around the building shut off, leaving the area in pure darkness. Frantic yells and screams filled the corridors of the building, all at once.

“What happened to the lights?!”

“Who turned the lights off?!”

“What the hell is going on here!”

A moment passed before two shrieks were heard from outside the front door, all the guards within the lobby immediately turned towards the two large glass doors, the brass handles reflecting the green laser beams that were mounted to the bottom of the SMG’s. A few seconds passed seemingly an eternity for the guards that held their guns shakily at the glass doors in such a petrified manner that even a large bug would cause a barrage of bullets to be fired at the doors, then, the light’s flickered on and off twice revealing the grizzly demise of two of the four door guards. Both were as pale as ghosts with indescribable fear struck looks on their faces, as if all their blood had been drained from them long ago. Below them, enormous pools of blood spread across the tiled exterior and dripped down the small flight of stairs that lead up to the now blood coated doors.

The other two door guards were inside slowly backing away from the doors, one of them shaking so much that the bullets in the clip of his weapon could be heard rattling around the room and then, the lights came back on.

“What in the hell just happened, this building runs off it’s own power generator and has several backups, there is no way the power of this building could drop!”

“I don’t know what happened Mr. Akago, I can go and speak to the techies that operate the generator machinery and see if they can come to an explanation if you like.”

“Yes! Do it and be quick, something bad is happening . . I can feel it . . .”

As Akago’s bodyguard opened the door to his office the lights again went off, and voices

[whispers]

echoed through the building.

Back in the lobby the guards were clustered together, green laser beams netted the room in search for anything that seemed hostile finally all coming to focus on an orange lightning bolt that struck the floor from a small glowing orange orb floating seven feet from the ground, the lightning itself leaving a mark on the floor, a brightly glowing orange pentacle on the ground that seemed to radiate with energy of some sort. All the guards stared towards the pentacle, guns ****ed and ready to fire at anything that moved, but nothing came, one overly curious guard slowly walked up to it, standing at the edge of the glowing rune, but all went to hell after that. Loud whispers filled the lobby, like several dozen children whispering a foreign language in demonic unison, one guard dropping his weapon and collapsing to his knees, slowly rocking back and forth mumbling Hail Mary’s. Then without warning an enormous shockwave blasted the lobby, shattering every window and cracking nearby windows on higher levels, the entire room was covered in a never-ending runic symbol, from ceiling to floor, wall to wall, the room glowed orange for a second as a second bolt of lightning struck the pentacle on the ground but instead of dissipating it stayed splitting open into what appeared to be a portal, and from it stepped the red haired man.

“He’s here . . .” Akago mumbled a few seconds before his bodyguard walked back into the room.

“The generators are completely o--“

The guard stopped his sentence as Akago promptly interrupted him.

“Kelesk is here . . The Chaos Spectre . . .”

The bodyguard nodded once and slowly walked over to a briefcase that lay on a chair across the room, as he opened it, it slowly revealed a Jackhammer, and around three dozen shells.

“If he comes in here Sir, he will be eliminated.”

In the lobby Kelesk stood in the middle of a war field, and he alone was the other side, reaching over his shoulder and grabbing the cold metal staff. As he drew the staff, all hell again broke loose.

“Put the weapon down!”

“Put it down now!”

“Put your weapon down and put your hands where we can see them.”

Kelesk smiled devilishly as the lights flickered again, revealing the bloody slaughter that had been set upon all those around him. The last contingent of lasers that were that were trained on him started to shake with a fearful expression, the rattling of SMG clips forced a smile to the spectre’s face which slowly changed to a demonic grin that would put the devil himself to shame, clenching the staff in one hand as he lowered his head slightly, still staring at the source of the green contingent of light beams that were focused shakily all over him the lights flashed again as two huge yellowy-green teeth burst from each end of the staff, the darkness revealing the two blades of chaotic energy clearly as the last few discharges of energy jumped around the room along metal objects, crackling on them for a few seconds before settling down. A few of the guards who had been looking where the spectre’s face was when the lights flickers immediately dropped their weapons and froze in fear shaking in a near seizure like state. Slowly the two yellow blades moved around and a heavy footstep echoed through the room followed by a low, evil giggle.

Akago was in a near uncontrollable state, frustrated beyond belief with the lighting problems knowing that if the lights were out, so would the security systems; the large tremor that he had felt from below wasn’t reassuring either.

“Call for the Elite Spec. Op. guys! Tell them to get here A.S.A.P.!”

“But Sir, we don--“

“Do it!”

“Yes Sir.”

If there is something wrong here, then I am not going to take any chances . . .

Then the forsaken screams and gurgles echoed up through the building corridors and stairwells. Akago’s eyes shot open in fear as the monitor in front of him flashed on and off as the lights flickered on and off again revealing the bloody wasteland that was left in the lobby. The white marble floor now nearly covered in blood, the walls too had blood streaked across them. Then most of the lights came back on, most flickered and died straight away but the ones that didn’t usually blacked out for a while before flickering back alight.

In the blood streaked lobby the Spec. Ops. Team entered through the blood stained glass doors, their red lasers painting every inch of the room in search of the culprit of this manifest of slaughter.

“You all must be so pitiful to defend a man such as Akago. I could not imagine being thrown into this fruitless slaughter headfirst. You all might as well not even be armed.”

An orange blur shot through the team and one of soldiers dropped to the ground, blood spilling onto the ground below his neck, he was dead before he even had even began to drop. Two of the team looked down at the dropped soldier, his face grew paler and paler as more and more blood ran from a red line of blood that ran diagonally upward from the middle left of his neck, the line of blood ending in the middle of his right cheek just below the eye. Another soldier kneeled down and lifted the downed man’s upper body up, doing so the dead soldiers head flopped backward, opening the wound. The gruesome sight making the soldier immediately drop the man and turn around throwing up. On the wall behind the group the orange energy glaive lay embedded in the white marble wall dissipating after a few seconds.

“There is no killing what can't be killed; no stopping what can't be stopped. This is dread, truly dread.”

On cue every single Spec. Ops. Soldier opened fire around the room; the M4 fire blanketing the room, littering the blood streaked marble walls with bullet holes and covering the pools of blood with emptied bullet cases.

“Cease fire! Cease fire!”

Then the same demonic laugh echoed around the room like before, and the teeth-like blades burst from the staff followed by what looked like wisping smoke from behind the scythe, seconds later bursting into orange flames revealing a human shape within, the creatures demonic orange eyes glowing as bright as the flames that engulfed him.

The creature jumped off a brass railing that was dripping and stained with blood, and into a puddle of blood below splashing it around a bit. The creatures white shirt was stained red with blood and even his dark grey pants were darkened in areas with blood. The creature was smirking devilishly, almost laughing. It was all a game to him; no human could be this destructive.

“Chaos Bending!”

The words echoed throughout the building reaching Akago’s office followed closely by another tremendous rumble, tortured screams taken far beyond pain and suffering could possibly induce and the sound of shattering glass.

“It’s him! He’s here!”

Akago was in more than a fearful state, he knew what the spectre was after, yet he could do nothing but try and delay him knowing that if the spectre got a hold of the dagger, his power would rival that of the unspeakable one and every one of his memories would return to him. The god of lightning had lead Akago to where he had found the dagger, entrusting him with the responsibility of defending the dagger and although he could hold Kelesk off whilst he didn’t have the dagger but his power would be overwhelming if he got close enough to even touch it.

Akago could do nothing but wait in preparation for the onslaught that was coming, and he knew it was coming in full force.

In the lobby one soldier remained standing in a pile of twisted and mangled bodies that had been torn to pieces by unknown forces. He stood dripping with the blood of his former colleagues; he had long ago dropped his M4 and stood paralysed in fear as the creature before him walked over the dead bodies around him and stopped looking down at him, the smile had disappeared and now he wore a serious face the blades of the scythe that had cut open one of the soldiers and thrown him across the room were still active, glowing with a more orangey-yellow colour than the previous yellowy-green.

“Wh- What are you . . ?”

“Me . . ?” replied the creature, “I am your worst nightmare’s worst nightmare . . .” he continued, a small smirk appearing in the corner of his mouth.

The soldiers face turned sharply to a look of pain and he finally fell to the ground and didn’t move, his hand clenching his chest; his heart had exploded. The smirk grew slightly bigger as Kelesk turned and walked off, the blades of the rogue scythe dispelling back into the shaft leaving the room in complete darkness and headed up the escalator that lead up to the next level, a few feet in front of him an elevator to the higher levels. As he got to the open elevator a few shots were fired at him, his chaos aura flared aggressively as the shots hit it and distorted, twisting and bending before being flung off in a different directions. Kelesk stoped his slow walk forward and turned his lowered head to face the guard that had shot at him. The guards stood shakily beginning to lower his weapon, the elevator was open as that guard had been sent down to see what had happened, though he hadn’t made it to the escalator that Kelesk had just come up before seeing him. An orange glow sparked to life in the spectre’s hand before he threw a chaos glaive at the man; the glaive flying clean through his arm, dissipating a few seconds after embedding in the wall behind him. Kelesk smiled as he caught a glimpse of the ring of blood that began to run from the guards arm and kept walking towards the elevator. The petrified guard had no idea what had happened, he had seen the orange light fly through the air but that had been all. Raising the arm he held his gun in he felt a sudden sharp jolt of pain surge through his arm, before quickly lowering it and giving out a grunt of agony. Kelesk stopped and looked at the guard who had finally noticed the ring of blood on his arm, in time to also see his arm fall to the ground; the spectre’s conscience laughed with pure evil as he entered the elevator and pressed the button for the top floor, a scream of agony rushing through the closing elevator doors behind him.

The elevator stopped at the top floor, the level Akago’s office was on, and things in his room were becoming stranger by the minute. Constant whispers spun around the room, taunting Akago and the guards; the lights flickering on and off as if in a disco room. Some of the guards were even seeing things, their vision distorting and twisting as flashes of orange covering the real world, some of them not mentally stable enough to cope with the intense strain put upon their minds, collapsing to the ground in tears mumbling.

Akago too was beginning to succumb to the spirits that taunted with the minds of the guards, but being mentally and physically stronger he could resist to a degree. Then a sight that made everyone in the room fill with fear. A pure black incarnation of Kelesk stood in the doorway of the room, it’s arms folded. As it took a step into the room Akago walked down the few steps that lead to his desk and stood before the spectre.

“You scare me not creature . . You will never lay hands on the dagger, not now and not ever!”

With that Akago charged up the nanites in his right fist and threw a powerful right hook at the incarnation which landed solidly on it’s left cheek, but it didn’t even flinch.

“I am but a figment of your imagination, coming as a warning . . . Be prepared to bow before me or you all shall perish.” And with that it disappeared into a cloud of smoke and fled into the darkness.

“Oh, I’ll be ready for you Kelesk . . . I’ll be ready . . .”

At the end of the hallway leading to Akago’s office, the sound of bending metal could be heard as the barricaded elevator doors were torn apart by chaotic energies, terrifying screams followed not long after. The only thing hiding the gruesome end of the guards that tried to hold their own at the elevator was darkness.

A loud thud was heard as the last of five guards hit the floor, his wounds the worst of them all yet he struggled to get back to his feet. But the spectre showed no mercy for the weak, any who persisted would die at his feet. Kelesk picked the guard up and threw him to his feet a few metres back, both blades of the rogue scythe sparked to life, lighting the top floor for long enough for the guards in Akago’s office to see the demise of the other four guards. As the darkness set in, all that could be seen were the two blades of the scythe glowing a fiery orange. They watched as time after time the blades slashed through the guards body until both blades dissipated, the discharge of energy flickering the lights again in time to see the fifth guard fall to the ground in dozens of pieces, blood spilling to the ground before it all went dark once again.
 

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Alright, I'll start off by stating, I enjoyed Akagos story more than Kelesks, but Kelesk had some interesting elements and a nic eamount of detail (don't worry about grammar, I don't judge fights on spelling errors or stupid crap like that, this isn't an english class)
One thing I do enjoy is flow, and Kelesks wasn't as choppy as Akago's, even though both had their flaws.

Kelesk takes round 1, continue men.
 
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Urgh.

I guess I'm just not cut out for this.

Consider this match cancelled.
 
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Wow.. In my absence of Fight Club I missed this...

Shame to have it end like this though...

*offers handshake*
 

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